In the Morning

Caroline and Albert sit across from each other at the breakfast table. As Albert chews mindlessly on his eggs and sips his coffee, Caroline watches him and becomes more and more agitated. “Stop it!” she yells, startling Albert.

“Stop what?” 

Caroline jumps to her feet pointing in his direction. “That!” Albert puts down his fork calmly and says “I’m not doing anything.” Caroline slinks back down into her chair. “I’m so sick of you.”

“Why?”

“I just hate you.”

“But what am I doing?”

“I don’t know. I think its your face.”

“What about my face?”

“It’s all wrong.”

“What?”

Caroline straightens out her posture and stares directly into Albert’s eyes. “Look. I need some space. Could you leave for a few days?”

“But I live here.”

“I know. Just a few days.”

“No!”

“You don’t love me.”

“Of course I do! But where do you want me to go?”

“Away. Anywhere. I can’t look at you right now.”

“Are you breaking up with me?”

“Oh my God! You are so dramatic! Forget it.”

“What?!”

“Just forget it.” Caroline gets up and tosses her plate of untouched eggs into the sink. “I’m going to work. I’ll see you later.” 

Albert turns his attention back to his food. “Ok…Have a good day.” 

“You are so disgusting.”

Caroline grabs her keys and storms out of the house. Albert stays seated and finishes his breakfast.

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6 thoughts on “In the Morning

  1. I’m concerned about the wasted food. Do you think Albert took he food out of the sink and finished that, too?
    Keep exploring, char. keep pushing. even though you’re writing short pieces, go farther than what you know. go for the unknown.
    where does caroline go?

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  2. hi charlotte. please send your stories to me at this address. gloriavassy@yahoo.com
    this story is just a slice of life in the typical day for caroline and albert. my feeling is that they start most days like this,and albert is the recipient of her mental abuse. i would love to read what happens when she comes home from work, and what sort of job he has. keep it up. good work.

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  3. I loved it. I think you should write more about Caroline and Albert. Caroline is so mean to Albert yet you feel sorry for her because she comes across so frustrated and unhappy. Or is she? Albert just eats his eggs. Maybe Albert is used to her talking to him like this and they are just having their regular S&M breakfast. It would be fun to find out.

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  4. its funny, this latest one isn’t as alive as all your other stuff. we can usually see your characters so vividly because you’ve set them up with narrative. I figure perhaps this is an exercise in dialogue, but you’re so good at dialogue when you set up your people. even the previous story is so awesome because the manner of speech and idiom, using words like ‘anyways’ and other specific speech patterns bring that character such life.

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